Does it need to be longer? How can I make it longer?
What details and information would enhance the writing?
What kinds of extra quotes should I add in, if any?
How can I improve the intro?
Whats missing?
Thursday, February 4, 2010
Mentor Interview Intro Rough Draft
At one of her two labratories and offices, Dr. Terry Jernigan has a brief break in her active day. The self proclaimed "absent minded professor" is always busy with everything from being a professor, a researcher and even launching a major research project. She knew that she wanted to be a physiologist as a teenager, but she never imaginged that she would follow a boyfriend to Calfornia, get her masters degree, work on one of the first CAT scanners and become a professor at UCSD. She talked with us about growing up, her college experience, and her career.
Does it need to be longer? How can I make it longer?
What details and information would enhance the writing?
What kinds of extra quotes should I add in, if any?
How can I improve the intro?
Whats missing?
Does it need to be longer? How can I make it longer?
What details and information would enhance the writing?
What kinds of extra quotes should I add in, if any?
How can I improve the intro?
Whats missing?
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I don't think that it really needs to be longer, but maybe you could add in a physical description of your mentor. Maybe you could add like descriptive words into like the middleish area kind of like the show don't tell rule on the writing list. You probably don't need any extra quotes in the writing because you'll have quotes in the interview, but I think that how you worked the quote into the writing was really good! Your intro is really good but I think pretty much maybe add in like descriptive words could be helpful to your interview!
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